Posted by Michael Addy (66.205.140.92) on June 24, 2005 at 6:55:48 p.m.:
In Reply to: Scogginsessay2roughdraft posted by Paula Scoggins on June 23, 2005 at 3:32:32 p.m.:
Reader's Name: Michael Addy
Writers Name: Paula Scoggins
1) Review the assignment requirements. Read the essay. In your opinion, does the writer answer the essay assignment in this piece? Explain.
The essay does talk about two specific elements of drama as it relates to "A Raisin in the Sun."
2) Write the thesis statement here:
I may have missed it, but I can not find a thesis.
3) Does the thesis attempt to prove a specific idea, or is it too general?
I understand the premise of the paper, but there is no specific thesis statement.
4) What specific evidence does the writer provide to support the thesis?
There are no quotes which would make your point more effectively received by the reader.
5) Does the writer explicitly show how this evidence supports his/her view? Are connections made for the reader?
There is some evidence, but it seems to be general and nonspecific evidence. The connections are there.
6) Does each paragraph connect with the thesis?
I was unsure of the thesis.
7) Is there additional evidence which the writer has missed?
8) Does the conclusion sum up the writer's point?
I thought that the call for personal reflection in the conclusion was well done but that there should have been a clearer chain of events in the writing.
9) Give the writer at least one suggestion for improving this paper.
I think it is good but it seems to have a lot of summary of the situation and settings and could use more conclusions about how the setting actually affects the way the play is read and taken. Good work.