Posted by Lourdes Hernandez (66.242.169.135) on June 24, 2005 at 9:42:07 p.m.:
In Reply to: Essay 2 Rough Draft posted by Michael Addy on June 23, 2005 at 7:41:38 p.m.:
Reader's Name: Lourdes Hernandez
Writers Name: Michael Addy
1) Review the assignment requirements. Read the essay. In your opinion, does the writer answer the essay assignment in this piece? Explain. Yes, I think the writer use theme as his element of drama.
2) Write the thesis statement here: The Younger family as a whole are dreaming of what the future holds for them with an innocence that has never confronted reality.
3) Does the thesis attempt to prove a specific idea, or is it too general? The thesis attempt is specific.
4) What specific evidence does the writer provide to support the thesis? The paragraphs constantly referr to “ A Raisin in the Sun” for examples.
5) Does the writer explicitly show how this evidence supports his/her view? Are connections made for the reader? Yes I can see how he uses a examples from “A Raisin in the Sun “ to support the view.
6) Does each paragraph connect with the thesis? Yes, each paragraph connects with the thesis.
7) Is there additional evidence which the writer has missed? No.
8) Does the conclusion sum up the writer's point? Yes, the conclusion referrs to the first paragaph.
9) Give the writer at least one suggestion for improving this paper.
The paper looks good to me.