Posted by Sara Dastoum (24.10.25.68) on July 6, 2005 at 9:12:59 p.m.:
In Reply to: Re: essay 3 poetry-rough draft posted by Vangessay3 on July 5, 2005 at 10:43:40 p.m.:
Reader's Name: Sara Dastoum
Writers Name: Kristi Vang
1) Review the assignment requirements. Read the essay. In your opinion, does the writer answer the essay assignment in this piece? Explain.
The writer does analyze the poem, which was the assignment.
2) Write the thesis statement here:
While I do not disregard the other elements of poetry that are quite obviously evident in this poem, I will attempt to analyze “She Walks in Beauty” by stanza using the element of imagery.
3) Does the thesis attempt to prove a specific idea, or is it too general?
The writer is specific in analyzing the poem based on imagery.
4) What specific evidence does the writer provide to support the thesis?
Provides quotes from the poem.
5) Does the writer explicitly show how this evidence supports his/her view? Are connections made for the reader?
The writer provides opinions along with the quotes for the reader.
6) Does each paragraph connect with the thesis?
Most paragraphs do connect with the thesis.
7) Is there additional evidence which the writer has missed?
I believe the quotations provided are enough.
8) Does the conclusion sum up the writer's point?
The conclusion does sum up the writer's point.
9) Give the writer at least one suggestion for improving this paper.
Although your conclusion was good, I would suggest going into a little more detail about the overall imagery.
>Kristi Vang
>English 301
>Jeanne Guerin
>Essay 3 (Poetry)-Rough Draft
>Tuesday, July 05, 2005
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> As I read the poem “She Walks in Beauty” by Lord Byron I see that it is very vivid and full of beautiful images. The images in this poem are crucial because it will help the reader to understand what Byron is trying to say in short words. While I do not disregard the other elements of poetry that are quite obviously evident in this poem, I will attempt to analyze “She Walks in Beauty” by stanza using the element of imagery.
>The imagery itself had struck me as the most wonderful aspect of this poem hence; the poem begins “she walks in beauty, like the night of cloudless climes and starry skies.” Here we have the first element of imagery which seems something of a contrast as how could someone walk in beauty like the night, when the night would be dark and it would be difficult to appreciate someone’s beauty at that time of the day. The image of potentially a thunderstorm, the beauty of the lightening with dark clouds comes to mind; however, here Byron talks of cloudless climes as in a cloudless climate in starry skies. One would suggest a beautiful night without clouds. The beautiful climate, at first to me is a walk along the beach in a beautiful area with the fresh breeze of coolness. An ideal climate is not too cold or too hot not causing one to sweat or causing one to chill with this beautiful starry skies not causing one to obscure this beautiful night. The climate as Byron portrays it is a very tropical climate with a nice cool breeze during the night as the waves moves swiftly in the ocean.
>This poem is written by a male who is deeply in love with this woman. As a female reading this poem I may have a different imagery than a male would if he was reading this poem. When a woman sees another woman, who is beautiful that her beauty is apparent even at night she may not have a sensual connotation associated with it. She may only envy this woman for beauty and her body. While it is not obvious in this poem there is certainly some sensuality, it is very subtle, but as a male might imagined a tall thin woman very shapely and graceful with long flowing black hair with a beautiful dress. As a woman, one might imagine this woman walking on the beach to be tall but not thin with long hair because women are bias against one another.
>Byron talks about how this woman beauty could be more apparent “and all that’s best of dark and bright meet in her aspect and her eyes.” Here one starts to see the deeper image of imagery. One sees the best of dark and bright could this means the best of good and evil or could it mean the good or bad aspect of a relationship that is about to start or is about to end or could it simply mean an illustration of things yet to come within the poem and the relationship. But they all meet in her aspect that is in her continence how she presents herself, how she walks along the beach and the gaze in her eyes. This could be the good and evil in her eyes or everyone’s eye at any given time. He presents this in such a way that the few words used as in poetry gives the reader volume to stiffer.
>In line five and six express images such that “thus mellowed to that tender light which heaven to gaudy day denies.” Byron describes the beauty of this woman eyes, and her gaze as she walks along the beach has mellowed to the tender light. The light which is upon her face, the way that she looks at things, how the ostentatious day has denied her beauty. It has appeared in this twilight, in this time as she walks along this beach and that the daylight has mellowed so that one can appreciate the beauty that she has in this particular clime and or climate.
>Byron continues to express this woman, which he imagines as “one shade the more, one ray the less, had half impaired the nameless grace.” Does she need a bit more sun or does she needs a bit less has gazed and the beauty of the daylight diminishes her beauty in this twilight. Has it half impaired the nameless grace or has it caused her beauty to become somewhat lessen because of this twilight or does it make it all the more eloquent. The images as I see here is that her beauty might be more apparent if only she had slightly a little bit more sun from a slightly different angle. One might see the sun distracting her beauty away from her.
>The poet continues with “which waves in every raven tress, or softly lightens o’er her face.” The image as I see at this point is a beautiful woman walking along the beach in a long black flowing glossy dress with long soft beautiful locks of hair flowing over her face as she walks along this dark night on the beach with the nice cool breeze. This only lends one to appreciate the beauty that she is encompassing as she walks gently in the long flowing gown along the beach. On line eleven and twelve, Byron expresses to his reader “where thoughts serenely sweet express, how pure, how dear their dwelling-place.” The long flowing hair and her beautiful dress are not unmatched the beauty in her mind her spirituality. The images as one can see is only of beautiful thoughts that she serenely displays as she walks along the beach with grace with her beautiful black dress and her long black flowing hair under the beautiful starry skies in the twilight in the beautiful climate.
> Byron continues with his reader in rapture with his description “and on that cheek, and o’er that brow, so soft, so calm, yet eloquent” where the long hair is flowing down over her beautiful face and her long black gown as she walks in this twilight. This all combines and only enraptures the reader’s only further in the beauty and the thoughts and the countenance and serenity of this woman. The images of “She Walks in Beauty” continue with Byron stating that “the smiles that win, the tints that glow, but tell of days in goodness spend.” In further development of her spirituality the smiles that win. How many times has she won someone over with that beautiful eloquent smile that beautiful countenance with that long flowing hair, has she done this before as one may question. As she walks along the beach with someone with tents that glows but tales a days in goodness spent lending itself to the beauty of her spirit how deeply pure this person really was as in Byron’s eye. Byron ends his poem “She Walks in beauty” with “a mind at peace with all below, a heart whose love is innocent.” The image here as one may get is the picture that this persons mind is at peace with all below. She is an angel she is one above she is transcendent above all. She is looking down at only at people on Earth with a gentle countenance and a pureness spirit and heart. A heart whose love is innocent, a heart that knows only true love is innocent.